In the frigid vastness of space, the R.L.S. Legacy soared like a sleek comet. Led by the indomitable Captain Jim Hawkins, whose eyes sparkled with stardust and ambition, he and his crew forged thei…

New story, I hope you like it. Feedback always welcome.

  • poVoq@slrpnk.netM
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    1 year ago

    I can see what you are trying to do in this text, but as a metaphor it doesn’t really work and the use of “open web” etc makes it too up front as well. Which leaves this text in a weird half metaphorical / half not situation that is rather confusing.

    And it isn’t very Solarpunkish 😉